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flagnine1
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Yuki's Request Mar 15, 2011 22:40:30 GMT -5

Post by flagnine1 on Mar 15, 2011 22:40:30 GMT -5

Requirements: Have completed "Rare Coin".
Length: Short
Trigger: Talking to Yuki again after completing Rare Coin.

$Speaker=Yuki

YukiRequest1
You see Yuki calling you over.

YukiRequest2
$speaker You did a good job with that simple fetch job earlier, I have another task for you. You see my last pussy licker went and got herself freed by taking the test, and I am to busy to train another. You don't seem busy right now so train me a new pussy licker.

Returning with slave with <75 Cunnilingus

YukiRequest3
$speaker She is awful. Take her back and do train her properly this time.

Returning with slave with >75 Cunnilingus

YukiRequest4
$speaker Yes she will do. You might actually have a talent for this. As payment I will teach you a trick.

Reward: Teaches how to tell different types of sex slaves (regular, les, and futa) apart in auction before you buy. + guild reputation. +100g.

I think this is the right format that bloss wanted. Just another simple train and turn in style quest for the early game.

"Mugi Zombie is laughing at player party."

irrbloss
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Posts: 14

Yuki's Request Mar 16, 2011 5:02:27 GMT -5

Post by irrbloss on Mar 16, 2011 5:02:27 GMT -5

Three minor details about the language:

You see, (comma) my last pussy licker went and got herself freed by taking the test, and I am too busy to train another. You don't seem busy right now, (comma) so train me a new pussy licker.

I imagine the gaydar would be an appreciated addition.

Last Edit: Mar 16, 2011 5:03:26 GMT -5 by irrbloss

swordwind
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Yuki's Request Mar 19, 2011 22:41:54 GMT -5

Post by swordwind on Mar 19, 2011 22:41:54 GMT -5

What I'd recommend

You see Yuki calling you over.
You notice Yuki calling you over.

$speaker You did a good job with that simple fetch job earlier, I have another task for you. You see my last pussy licker went and got herself freed by taking the test, and I am to busy to train another. You don't seem busy right now so train me a new pussy licker.
$speaker You did a good job with that simple job earlier, so I have another task for you. You see, my last pussy-licker went and freed herself by taking the test, and I am too busy to train another. You don't seem busy right now, so train me a new pussy-licker.

$speaker She is awful. Take her back and do train her properly this time.
$speaker She's awful. Take her back - and do train her properly this time.

$speaker Yes she will do. You might actually have a talent for this. As payment I will teach you a trick.
$speaker Yes, she will do. You might actually have a knack for this. As payment, I will teach you a trick.

I've included all of Irrbloss' suggestions, as I agree with them.