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Post by flashnovice on Feb 4, 2011 20:47:31 GMT -5
I'm not sure if I should do these all at once, or as I come across them.
Should I include the reason for the change ?
lamia.as
Line 10:
OLD: asMouseText:"Lamia's are an excellent guard around the house and are feared by all the slaves. She does not like to leave the residence.",
NEW:asMouseText:"Lamias are excellent guards around the house and are feared by all the slaves. She does not like to leave the residence.",
Line 208:
OLD: "Coudn't help your slave. Is washing the hair after an insect encounter.",
NEW: "Couldn't help your slave. She is washing her hair after an insect encounter.",
Line 314:
OLD: "Work was progressing slowly... she dozed of while your slave was working.",
NEW: "Work was progressing slowly... she dozed off while your slave was working.",
Line 315:
OLD: "She got more paint on herself than elsewh12ere. If I she would rub her breasts on the canvas, we could at least sell it as abstract art",
NEW: "She got more paint on herself than elsewhere. If she would rub her breasts on the canvas, we could at least sell it as abstract art",
Line 319:
OLD: "\"The balance is a little bad, but u did a good job.\" Lamia gave some tips on how to improve her skills.",
NEW: "\"The balance is a little bad, but she did a good job.\" Lamia gave her some tips on how to improve her skills.",
fairy.as
Line 10:
OLD: asMouseText:"Fairy's are able to change her size at will, she spends most of the time in a small size exploring cracks and niches for treasure.",
NEW:asMouseText:"Fairies are able to change size at will. She spends most of the time in a small size exploring cracks and niches for treasure.",
Line 398:
OLD: "Since the work wasnt coming together, she ended up playing with the paints.",
NEW: "Since the work wasn't coming together, she ended up playing with the paints.",
neko.as
Line 299:
OLD: FAIL_TRY , "She failed to do anything, opting instead to sleep in. On the bright side, atleast she seems a little more motivated and energized, watching the birds flying outside your wndow expectantly.",
NEW:FAIL_TRY , "She failed to do anything, opting instead to sleep in. On the bright side, at least she seems a little more motivated and energized, watching the birds flying outside your window expectantly.",
Line 300:
OLD: FAIL_REBEL , "Chose to do whatever the hell she wanted, she returns to you smelling like fish... atleast you think thats fish.",
NEW:FAIL_REBEL , "Chose to do whatever the hell she wanted. She returns to you smelling like fish... at least you think that's fish.",
Line 303:
OLD: "Your assistant returns to you, you ask her how the slave is progressing. She mearly shrugs, looking a bit dissapointed in the slave. She goes off to have a quick cat-nap before the next job.",
NEW: "Your assistant returns to you. You ask her how the slave is progressing. She merely shrugs, looking a bit disappointed in the slave. She goes off to have a quick cat-nap before the next job.",
Line 307:
OLD: "Your slave and assitant return for the shift. You ask your assitant how the slave is progressing. She responds \"She did good today, but more importantly, I caught a <i>HUGE</i> and I mean HUGE mouse while training her. Made for a delicious lunch for myself.\"",
NEW: "Your slave and assistant return from the shift. You ask your assistant how the slave is progressing. She responds \"She did good today, but more importantly, I caught a <i>HUGE</i> and I mean HUGE mouse while training her. It made a delicious lunch for me.\"",
Line 313:
OLD: "You see your slave and assitant returning, your slave seems the be carrying a basket though. As you near your assitant, you smell a familiar stench, but you can't quite remember what it is. You ask your assitant how the training went.",
NEW: "You see your slave and assistant returning. Your slave seems the be carrying a basket. As you near your assistant you smell a familiar stench, but you can't quite remember what it is. You ask your assistant how the training went.",
OK, at this point I'm just going to say there are MANY places that "assistant" is misspelled "assitant", rather than reproduce every one.
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Post by Mertius on Feb 5, 2011 13:08:38 GMT -5
Hi, I wanted to try and help a bit to improve this game. So far I've checked only the gametext.as. I'll continue later on. Hope it helps.  gametext.as Line 9 OLD: "Pulled from the pit at a young age, you spent your time acting as a squire for a guards-woman who saved your life. You learned how to use many weapons and how to perform their maintenance You are more than ready to train others in the arts of combat. You also have many contacts in the guard that patrol the pit." NEW: "Pulled from the pit at a young age, you spent your time acting as a squire for a guards-woman who saved your life. You learned how to use many weapons and how to perform their maintenance. You are more than ready to train others in the arts of combat. You also have many contacts in the guard that patrol the pit." Line 12 OLD: “Sold to a church, you spent the time up to now serving the priests and priestesses of one of the many cults that have popped up. Trained to be of service to those priests you are an expert in most sexual acts and can easily train others in them. Released by the church for being too old, it is now time to teach others what you have learned.” NEW: “Sold to a church, you have spent your time serving the priests and priestesses of one of the many cults that have popped up. Trained to be of service to those priests you are an expert in most sexual acts and can easily train others in them. Released by the church for being too old, it is now time to teach others what you have learned.” Line 18: OLD: "After crawling out from the pit, you were sold to a messenger company. For almost a decade you ran to every part of the town, learning everything about it. You also know almost everyone in " + town() + ", and even some things that you probably shouldn't about the people living beside the pit. You have also spent much time with merchants and know how to value merchandise." NEW: "After crawling out from the pit, you were sold to a messenger company. For almost a decade you ran to every part of the town, learning everything about it. You also know almost everyone in " + town() + ", and even some things that you probably shouldn't about the people living beside the pit. You have also spent a lot of time with merchants and know how to value merchandise." Line 21 OLD: "Money, money, money. You want it. You need it. Money is not an ends to a goal for you, it is the goal and you are an expert at accumulating it. The bottom line is more important then anything else and you would sell your own mom for a few gold more." NEW: "Money, money, money. You want it. You need it. Money is not the ends to a goal to you, it is the goal and you are an expert at accumulating it. The bottom line is more important than anything else and you would sell your own mom for a bit more gold." Line 33 OLD: "Your goal in life is simple: to be surrounded by girls at all times. A wide range of girls who are all there just to cater to your every desire. It is, perhaps, the simplest of goals, but to a true collector the quality and value of each girl and their training and service to you is all you need." NEW: "Your goal in life is simple: to be surrounded by girls at all times. A wide range of girls who are all there just to cater to your every desire. It is, perhaps, the simplest of goals, but for a true collector, the quality and value of each girl plus their training and service is all you need." Line 54 OLD: "You\'re a girl. Made of spices and everything nice... until you pull out the whip." NEW: "You're a girl. Made of spices and everything nice... until you pull out the whip." NOTE: Is the \ a part of code or a typo? Just in case I see it again. Line 105 OLD: “Sleep. The slave will spend this shift recovering her health. Normally all health is recovered with one sleep shift per a day.” NEW: “Sleep. The slave will spend this shift recovering her health. Full health is normally recovered with one sleep shift per day.” Line 130 OLD: "Dancing Practice. The slave will will practice simple rythmic movements and flexibility before specializing in a type of dance.” NEW: "Dancing Practice. The slave will will practice simple rhythmic movements and flexibility before specializing in a type of dance.” Line 139 OLD: "Painting Practice. The slave will learn the basics of painting and the basics of art and light." NEW: "Painting Practice. The slave will learn the basics of art such as painting and lighting." NOTE: May not be the best way to fix, but saying “the basics of” in the same sentence twice sounds weird. Line 202 OLD: "Type of room, and the room's upkeep. Upkeep is determined by the amount of supplies a room requires to be useful in training the girl." NEW: "Type of room, and the room's upkeep. Upkeep is determined by the amount of supplies a room requires for use in the girl’s training. Line 208 OLD: "Internal Security. Affects the chance that a girl will be able to run away. Certain jobs, furniture, skills of the assistants and other factors will influence the total number.” NEW: "Internal Security. Affects the chance that a girl will be able to run away. Certain jobs, furniture, assistant skills or other factors will influence the total number.” NOTE: Total number of what? Do you mean the total chance? Line 211 OLD: "External Defense. The chance of the slaves being attacked from outside elements while in their rooms." NEW: "External Defense. The slave’s chance of being attacked from outside elements while in their rooms." Line 214 OLD: "Furniture. Gives bonuses to the slaves in the room as well as add jobs and tasks." NEW: "Furniture. Gives bonuses to the slaves in the room as well as adding jobs and tasks." Line 217 OLD: "Room Jobs. All the jobs that are available for the slave to perform in this room. Just because you assign a slave to a job doesn't mean that she will be able to accomplish the task if her abilities or skills are not compatible or learned." NEW: "Room Jobs. All the jobs that are available for the slave to perform in this room. Just because you assign a slave to a job doesn't mean that she will be able to accomplish the task if her abilities or skills are not compatible or known." Line 427 OLD: ". Overall skill a slave has at lesbian sex. Most slaves specialize in one specific aspect of sex, though the most higly valued are the ones that are experts in all types." NEW: ". Overall skill a slave has at lesbian sex. Most slaves specialize in one specific aspect of sex, though the most highly valued are the ones that are experts in all types." NOTE: I’m guessing the period in front of almost all of these lines is intentional. Line 453 OLD: ". Overall skill a slave has at futanari sex using both her penis and vagina. Most slaves specialize in one specific aspect of sex, though the most higly valued are the ones that are experts in all types." NEW: ". Overall skill a slave has at futanari sex using both her penis and vagina. Most slaves specialize in one specific aspect of sex, though the most highly valued are the ones that are experts in all types." Line 520 OLD: ". A basic starting point of slaves in the arts of religion. Well before you decide what religion they should focus on." NEW” ". A basic starting point for slaves in the arts of religion. Well before you decide what religion they should focus on." |
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Post by Mertius on Feb 5, 2011 13:39:44 GMT -5
Decided to do some more. Continuing with the gametext.as
gametext.as
Line 564
OLD: "The number of rooms in your home occupied and the maximum number of rooms in your house able to be occupied by slaves. You can not have slaves in master bedrooms that do not have assistants.";
NEW: "The number of rooms occupied in your home and the maximum number of rooms able to be occupied by slaves. You can not have slaves in master bedrooms that do not have assistants.";
Line 570
OLD: "The upkeep cost that the auction block charges you for storing girls in the pens. Normal cost is 4gp a day.<br><br>Your cost for a girl is " + playerCharacter.charPenCost + "gp per a day.";
NEW: "The upkeep cost that the auction block charges you for storing girls in the pens. Normal cost is 4gp a day.<br><br>Your cost for a girl is " + playerCharacter.charPenCost + "gp per day.";
Line 573
OLD: "The pens are a storage area kept by the auction house. For a small price they will feed slaves that you can not house, allowing you to own more slaves then what your house can hold. While in the pens a slave's stats will not change, nor will any events for that slave happen."
NEW: "The pens are a storage area kept by the auction house. For a small price they will feed the slaves that you can not house, allowing you to own more slaves than what your house can hold. While in the pens, a slave's stats will not change, and no events will happen for that slave."
Line 719
OLD: "Quests that you have completed."
NEW: "Completed quests."
Line 722
OLD: "Quests that you have yet to complete."
NEW: "Incomplete quests."
NOTE: The last two are just suggestions. I believe it isn't necessary to expand on them so much.
Line 726
OLD: “Blood type of the slave. Really only matters for vampires and fortune telling."
NEW: “Slave’s blood type. Really only matters for vampires and fortune telling."
Line 744
OLD: "Your best guess as to the value of the slave. This is influenced by your skill in Judging the quality of a slave and will fluctuate."
NEW: "Your best guess as to the value of the slave. This is influenced by your skill in judging the quality of a slave and will fluctuate."
Line 747
OLD: "The size of the slave's breasts. They say bigger is better...but not if you're a lolicon."
NEW: "The size of the slave's breasts. They say bigger is better... but not if you're a lolicon."
Line 750
OLD: "Indicates whether or not the girl is a prime that the dimensional copies are based off of. It is said that a prime can alter reality to change fate. They are in high demand from both collectors and religious sects."
NEW: "Indicates whether or not the girl is the prime that the dimensional copies are based on. It is said that a prime can alter reality to change fate. They are in high demand from both collectors and religious sects."
Line 753
OLD: "This girl is a native to Otherworld. It is normally illegal to enslave native born girls. How she ended up your slave is best kept a secret from the authorities."
NEW: "This girl is native to Otherworld. It is normally illegal to enslave native born girls. How she ended up as your slave is best kept a secret from the authorities."
Line 838
OLD: "<br>Walk around Temple Street. " + town() + " law requires that all religious buildings be on this street, which is but a short walk from the pit. It is unknown whether the king made this rule to use them as a defense against attack or so that they would be the first destroyed."
NEW: "<br>Walk around Temple Street. " + town() + " law requires that all religious buildings be on this street, which is but a short walk from the pit. It is unknown whether the king made this rule to use them as a defense against attack or so that they would be the first to be destroyed."
Line 842
OLD: "<br>Walk around the Pit's Edge, a no man's land constantly patrolled by the guard. It is unknown what you will find that close to the pit...or what might find you.";
NEW: "<br>Walk around the Pit's Edge, a no man's land constantly patrolled by the guard. It is unknown what you will find that close to the pit... or what might find you.";
Line 854
OLD: "<br>Walk around the Green's Edge. For the most part a rather peaceful area that borders the town during the day. Crews of slaves continuously labor here to push back the constant growth. The night is another matter as the things that inhabit the green, mainly escapees from the pit, move around searching for food."
NEW: "<br>Walk around the Green's Edge. For the most part a rather peaceful area that borders the town during the day. Crews of slaves continuously labor here to push back the constant growth. Nighttime is another matter, as the things that inhabit the green, mainly escapees from the pit, move around searching for food."
Line 871
OLD: "<br>Do nothing, (will proabably be removed in final version)"
NEW: "<br>Do nothing, (will probably be removed in final version)"
Line 874
OLD: "<br>Repeat last personal supervision done during this shift. Unable to repeat no job was previously done during this shift."
NEW: "<br>Repeat last personal supervision done during this shift. Unable to repeat since no job was previously done during this shift."
Line 1215
OLD: "'s main street, called brilliantly \"Main Street\" where the majority of buisnesses, civil services, and craftman's guild halls are located. The road actually makes a horseshoe around two thirds of the pit's edge. One of the tips of the horseshoe leads to the red light district, the other to the temple district."
NEW: "'s main street, brilliantly called \"Main Street\", where the majority of businesses, civil services, and craftsmen's guild halls are located. The road actually makes a horseshoe around two thirds of the pit's edge. One of the tips of the horseshoe leads to the red light district, the other to the temple district."
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Post by Mertius on Feb 5, 2011 19:47:13 GMT -5
Sorry for triple posting, but I'm not sure such a long block of text can fit comfortably in a single post. Just finished checking the full gametext.as , fortunately, the text seems fine after line 1578. And now to play otherworld!
gametext.as
Line 1222
OLD: "Loyalty. An assistant's loyalty effects how likely she is to obey your orders. Assistants with really high loyalty may also reduce the amount they charge you to work. Loyalty can also influence how well the assistant trains the slave."
NEW: "Loyalty. An assistant's loyalty affects how likely she is to obey your orders. Assistants with really high loyalty may also reduce the amount they charge you to work. Loyalty can also influence how well the assistant trains the slave."
Line 1225
OLD: "Status: Lover, this is your original assistant. You do not have to pay her a salary. She is more likly to follow your instructions for training slaves, and is more willing to take you as a lover.<br>Status: Paid Assistant, this is an assistant who you are paying to assist you. She is unlikely to do anything extra with out being paid for the service."
NEW: "Status: Lover, this is your original assistant. You do not have to pay her a salary. She is more likely to follow your instructions for training slaves, and is more willing to take you as a lover.<br>Status: Paid Assistant, this is an assistant who you are paying to assist you. She is unlikely to do anything extra with out being paid for the service."
Line 1228
OLD: “Prefered sexual partner. Most assistants have a preference in the type of sex they enjoy. They will be more effective when traing that sexual activity and may be unhappy when training other sexual activity."
NEW: “Preferred sexual partner. Most assistants have a preference in the type of sex they enjoy. They will be more effective when training that sexual activity and may be unhappy when training other sexual activities."
Line 1243
OLD: "The current lust of your assistant. Lust affects concentration and happiness of an assistant. An assistant with too high lust will find it harder and harder to perform or what to perform non sexual trainings."
NEW: "The current lust of your assistant. Lust affects concentration and happiness of an assistant. An assistant with too high lust will find it harder and harder to perform or want to perform non sexual trainings."
NOTE: Meaning unclear, I guess the “what” should be “want?
Line 1246
OLD: "The current Attack of your assistant. The higher the attack the more damage."
NEW: "The current Attack of your assistant. The higher the attack the more damage is done."
Line 1258
OLD: "The assistant can choose any training and implement them, she is much more likely to choose her prefered training, and hightly unlikely to choose those she dislikes even when all is selected."
NEW: "The assistant can choose any training and implement them, she is much more likely to choose her preferred training, and highly unlikely to choose those she dislikes even when all is selected."
Line 1261
OLD: "The assistant will choose one of her prefered trainings or rest and train the slave in her area of expertise."
NEW: "The assistant will choose one of her preferred trainings or rest and train the slave in her area of expertise."
Line 1264
OLD: "The assistant will train the slave in sex. Some assistants may refuse though to train futanari."
NEW: "The assistant will train the slave in sex. Though some assistants may refuse to train futanari ."
Line 1267
OLD: "The assistant will focus on making money, any way she can sell the services of the slave to do so."
NEW: "The assistant will focus on making money any way she can, selling the slave’s services to do so."
Line 1270
OLD: "The assistant will focus the slave on artistic persuits such as music and drawing."
NEW: "The assistant will focus the slave on artistic pursuits such as music and drawing."
Line 1276
OLD: "The assistant will train your slave in the path of inner peace and traquility."
NEW: "The assistant will train your slave in the path of inner peace and tranquility."
Line 1291
OLD: "The assistant's bonuses to Internal Security when she is guarding the hallway."
NEW: "The assistant's raises Internal Security when she is guarding the hallway."
Line 1294
OLD: "The assistant's bonuses to External Defense when she is guarding the hallway."
NEW: "The assistant's raises External Defense when she is guarding the hallway."
NOTE: Hmm, shouldn’t it be something else? I mean, how does guarding the hallway raise external defenses.
Line 1320
OLD: "Rooms. The small spaces that the slaves are kept in and perform their daily training or tasks from."
NEW: "Rooms. The small spaces where the slaves are kept in and perform their daily training or tasks."
Line 1338
OLD: "<br>Job List: Rest, Whore, Lockdown, Cleaning.<br>The most basic type of room, if you could really call it that. Just an empty space waiting to become more."
NEW: "<br>Job List: Rest, Whore, Lockdown, Cleaning.<br>The most basic type of room, if you could really call it that. Just an empty space wanting to become more."
NOTE: It’s probably fine as it is, but I got the feeling that “wanting” fits the context better than “waiting”.
Line 1405
OLD: ". The slave's skill at seeing the future, and interpretting it to a clients wishes."
NEW: ". The slave's skill at seeing the future, and interpreting it to a clients wishes."
Line 1578
OLD: "<br>Slept well and also had an erotic dream."
NEW: "<br>Slept well and had an erotic dream."
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Post by flashnovice on Feb 6, 2011 21:51:59 GMT -5
Here's the rest of the neko.as file edits.
In addition to spelling/grammar fixes, I've expanded some of the placeholders into actual text.
Line 316:
OLD: LES+BORED , "You ask your assitant how the training went. She shrugs, with a depressed look on her face. And goes off to play with the local mice again. At this point, you'd figure the mice would just run away.",
NEW: LES+BORED , "You ask your assistant how the training went. She shrugs, with a depressed look on her face, and goes off to play with the local mice again. At this point, you'd figure the mice would just run away.",
Line 317:
OLD: LES+HAPPY_1 , "You ask your assitant how the training went, she responds, “Alright I suppose, she nothing TOO special at this point. If we dress her up as a fish, or a mouse, I think she'd do better! Or atleast I'd do better...”",
NEW: LES+HAPPY_1 , "You ask your assistant how the training went. She responds “Alright I suppose. She is nothing TOO special at this point. If we dress her up as a fish, or a mouse, I think she'd do better! Or at least I'd do better...”",
Line 318:
OLD: LES+HAPPY_2 , "You ask your assitant how everthing went this shift, “She did well today, all I had to do was set the mood, some fish scented candles... a couple of faux mouse spectators... I think it really set the mood for her.”",
NEW: LES+HAPPY_2 , "You ask your assistant how everything went this shift. She says “She did well today. All I had to do was set the mood. Some fish scented candles... a couple of faux mouse spectators... I think it really set the mood for her.”",
Line 320:
OLD: "You decide to take a peek for yourself, and see how the training is going. You see your assitant on top of your slave, sensually rubbing herself against your slave. Your assitant uses her tail in ways you didn't even think were possible.",
NEW: "You decide to take a peek for yourself to see how the training is going. You see your assistant on top of your slave, sensually rubbing herself against your slave. Your assistant uses her tail in ways you didn't even think were possible.",
Line 321:
OLD: "With the enthusiasm your assitant has, you would swear shes doing this for a fish banquet. Soon your assitant asks your slave to get on top. You watch as your slave masterfully rubs up and down on your assitant, you can see the pure look of pleasure on your assitant's face.",
NEW: "With the enthusiasm your assistant has, you would swear she's doing this for a fish banquet. Soon your assistant asks your slave to get on top. You watch as your slave masterfully rubs up and down on your assistant. You can see the look of pure pleasure on your assistant's face.",
Line 322:
OLD: "Slowly, your slave slides down the body of your assitant, her mouth moving towards your assitant's pussy. Your slave licks her pussy masterfully, you could swear she has been doing this all her life. Your assitant moves around in pleasure. You decide you've seen enough, and head back to your quarters until your assitant reports to you.",
NEW: "Slowly, your slave slides down the body of your assistant, her mouth moving towards your assistant's pussy. Your slave licks her pussy masterfully. You could swear she has been doing this all her life. Your assistant moves around in pleasure. You decide you've seen enough and head back to your quarters until your assistant reports to you.",
Line 323:
OLD: "A bit later you can hear your assitant and your slave cry out in climax. You assume the training went perfectly.",
NEW: "A bit later you can hear your assistant and your slave cry out in climax. You assume the training went perfectly.",
Line 325:
OLD: FUT+BORED , "You ask your assitant how it all went this shift. “Well... I don't think she knows how to use it properly yet... I've seen rats fuck better than her. Oh, you've never seen a rat fuck huh? Well first they...” You stop her, you have no interest in hearing how rats mate.",
NEW: FUT+BORED , "You ask your assistant how it all went this shift. “Well... I don't think she knows how to use it properly yet... I've seen rats fuck better than her. Oh, you've never seen a rat fuck huh? Well first they...” You stop her, you have no interest in hearing how rats mate.",
Line 326:
OLD: FUT+HAPPY_1 , "You ask how the training went, your assitant responds “She did well today, not perfectly, but good enough, I think she's getting the hang of it, atleast a rat doesn't out perform her now.”",
NEW: FUT+HAPPY_1 , "You ask how the training went. Your assistant responds “She did well today, not perfectly, but good enough. I think she's getting the hang of it. At least a rat doesn't out perform her now.”",
Line 327:
OLD: FUT+HAPPY_2 , "You ask your assitant how the training went “I could have sworn she was doing this for a rat meal! It was just like having a man, except... you know.. the whole woman thing”",
NEW: FUT+HAPPY_2 , "You ask your assistant how the training went. “I could have sworn she was doing this for a rat meal! It was just like having a man, except... you know... the whole woman thing.”",
Line 328:
OLD: FUT+HAPPY_3 , "Your assitant comes up to you, you ask her how the training went. “She did perfectly, at this point I think she can out-perform a man! Im a bit sore, but that doesn't matter! She did well.”",
NEW: FUT+HAPPY_3 , "Your assistant comes up to you. You ask her how the training went. “She did perfectly. At this point I think she can out-perform a man! I'm a bit sore, but that doesn't matter! She did well.”",
Line 330:
OLD: MON+BORED , "Your assitant returns with your slave, you ask how it went, and how much money they made. She responds, “Well, she didn't do <i>terribly</i> but it was terrible enough for everyone to complain after they were done with her. We didn't make much money, sooo I figured I would just use the money to buy this tasty, tasty salmon, want some?”. You can only look down towards the ground in shame, you shake your head and return to your quarters.",
NEW: MON+BORED , "Your assistant returns with your slave. You ask how it went and how much money they made. She responds, “Well, she didn't do <i>terribly</i> but it was terrible enough for everyone to complain after they were done with her. We didn't make much money, sooo I figured I would just use the money to buy this tasty, tasty salmon. Want some?”. You can only look down towards the ground in shame, shake your head and return to your quarters.",
Line 331:
OLD: MON+HAPPY_1 , "Your slave and assitant return. You ask how it went this shift. Your assitant responds, “Well, she kind of just lays there and lets them fuck her, she could do a lot more to help pleasure the customers, but she isn't doing anything wrong. We made a bit of money as well. I didn't waste any on salmon this time I promise!” You can tell thats a blatant lie, you can smell the salmon on her breath.",
NEW: MON+HAPPY_1 , "Your slave and assistant return. You ask how it went this shift. Your assistant responds, “Well, she kind of just lays there and lets them fuck her. She could do a lot more to help pleasure the customers, but she isn't doing anything wrong. We made a bit of money as well. I didn't waste any on salmon this time I promise!” You can tell thats a blatant lie, you can smell the salmon on her breath.",
Line 332:
OLD: MON+HAPPY_2 , "Your slave and assitant return, they go inside, your slave to rest and your assitant to count the money. You over-hear her counting it “One... two... three.... seven.... wait no thats not how it goes. One.... two.... three.... four.... eleven.... wait wait no.” This goes on for awhile, you decide just to leave her to counting the money, you don't even want to ask how the training went.",
NEW: MON+HAPPY_2 , "Your slave and assistant return. They go inside, your slave to rest and your assistant to count the money. You over-hear her counting it “One... two... three... seven... wait, no, that's not how it goes. One... two... three... four... eleven... wait, wait, no.” This goes on for awhile. You decide just to leave her to counting the money. You don't even want to ask how the training went.",
Line 333:
OLD: MON+HAPPY_3 , "Your assitant and slave returns from a hard day's night. They've been working like dogs, its been a hard day's night, they just wanna sleep in, like some logs. You ask how it went, “It went perfectly she did everything right to please the customers.” She tosses you the huge bag of money shes made, theres enough money in this bag to write a dollar sign on front of it... wait... whats a dollar?",
NEW: MON+HAPPY_3 , "Your assistant and slave return from a hard day's night. They've been working like dogs, its been a hard day's night, they just wanna sleep in, like some logs. You ask how it went, “It went perfectly. She did everything right to please the customers.” She tosses you the huge bag of money she's made. There's enough money in this bag to write a dollar sign on the front of it... wait... what's a dollar?",
Line 335:
OLD: BJ+BORED , "Placehold BJ Bored",
NEW: BJ+BORED , "Without a cat's sandpaper tongue, she'll never be any good, so why bother training her ?",
Line 336:
OLD: BJ+HAPPY_1 , "Placehold BJ Happy 1",
NEW: BJ+HAPPY_1 , "I have to use a... demonstration aid. She's having a little trouble adjusting to it.",
Line 337:
OLD: BJ+HAPPY_2 , "Placehold BJ Happy 2",
NEW: BJ+HAPPY_2 , "Her tongue is very talented. If only I could get her to wash herself with it.",
Line 338:
OLD: BJ+HAPPY_3 , "Placehold BJ Happy 3",
NEW: BJ+HAPPY_3 , "I almost wish I had the equipment to fully appreciate how well trained she now is.",
Line 341:
OLD: "Got bored, so painted your slave face with her fingers.",
NEW: "Got bored, so she painted your slave's face with her fingers.",
Line 342:
OLD: "Your slave and your assitant return from the Art training, your slave doesn't look too happy, covered in paint. You ask your assitant how it went, “She didn't do anything but make a mess, <i>I</i> however made this finger painting! Isn't it great?”. Its not great, but you decide not to break her heart.",
NEW: "Your slave and your assistant return from art training. Your slave doesn't look too happy, covered in paint. You ask your assitant how it went. “She didn't do anything but make a mess. <i>I</i> however made this finger painting! Isn't it great?”. It's not great, but you decide not to break her heart.",
Line 344:
OLD: ART+HAPPY_1 , "Your slave and assitant return from the Art training, this time your slave seems a bit happy, and a little less messy. You ask your assitant for a progress report, “She did well today, nothing you'd find in a museum, like a nice painting of a delicious mouse, or of a scrumptous salmon, but she did paint a nice tree.”",
NEW: ART+HAPPY_1 , "Your slave and assistant return from art training. This time your slave seems a bit happy and a little less messy. You ask your assistant for a progress report. “She did well today, nothing you'd find in a museum, like a nice painting of a delicious mouse or of a scrumptious salmon, but she did paint a nice tree.”",
Line 345:
OLD: ART+HAPPY_2 , "Here comes your slave and assitant, returning from the shift's Art class. You're a bit frightened to ask if they did anything today, since neither of them seems to be messy. You ask your assitant anyway “She did great today, she didn't even get ANY paint on herself. I mean, how did she do that? Getting paint on yourself is the best part!”",
NEW: ART+HAPPY_2 , "Here comes your slave and assistant, returning from the shift's Art class. You're a bit frightened to ask if they did anything today, since neither of them seems to be messy. You ask your assistant anyway. “She did great today, she didn't even get ANY paint on herself. I mean, how did she do that? Getting paint on yourself is the best part!”",
Line 347:
OLD: "Got so happy with your slave work that made a display for it in the mansion.",
NEW: "She got so happy with your slave's work that she made a display for it in the mansion.",
Line 349:
OLD: "Your slave and assitant return from the Art class, your slave however seems to be carrying a painting, you can't quite see what it is though. You ask your assitant how the class went, “How the class went? HOW THE CLASS WENT?! Do you not see this masterpiece she is carrying?! She did the best she could do today!",
NEW: "Your slave and assistant return from art class. Your slave, however, seems to be carrying a painting. You can't quite see what it is though. You ask your assitant how the class went. “How the class went? HOW THE CLASS WENT?! Do you not see this masterpiece she is carrying?! She did the best she could do today!",
Line 355:
OLD: DEH+BORED , "Placehold DEH Bored",
NEW: DEH+BORED , "She'll never make a good cat, so this is pointless.",
Line 356:
OLD: DEH+HAPPY_1 , "Placehold DEH Happy 1",
NEW: DEH+HAPPY_1 , "I'm trying to teach her not to speak, but to communicate with meows and body language. Her accent is horrible.",
Line 357:
OLD: DEH+HAPPY_2 , "Placehold DEH Happy 2",
NEW: DEH+HAPPY_2 , "I think it's working. We had a catfight. I won, of course.",
Line 358:
OLD: DEH+HAPPY_3 , "Placehold DEH Happy 3",
NEW: DEH+HAPPY_3 , "Let me turn her into a housecat, please ? We've already got the 'lying in the sun','napping all day', and 'acting aloof' parts down pat !",
Line 372:
OLD: RLG+BORED , "Placehold RLG Bored",
NEW: RLG+BORED , "Once you know about the Neko Cat-God, what's the point of learning anything else ?",
Line 373:
OLD: RLG+HAPPY_1 , "Placehold RLG Happy 1",
NEW: RLG+HAPPY_1 , "Do I really have to teach her about this ? This subject has such pointless attention to detail.",
Line 374:
OLD: RLG+HAPPY_2 , "Placehold RLG Happy 2",
NEW: RLG+HAPPY_2 , "At least there are a few verses of scripture that are a bit racy, if you read them properly.",
Line 375:
OLD: RLG+HAPPY_3 , "Placehold RLG Happy 3",
NEW: RLG+HAPPY_3 , "Thank goodness I'll soon be done teaching this tiresome subject. She's almost learned it all.",
Line 377:
OLD: CMB+BORED , "Placehold CMB Bored",
NEW: CMB+BORED , "How can I teach combat to a creature with no fangs and no claws ?",
Line 378:
OLD: CMB+HAPPY_1 , "Placehold CMB Happy 1",
NEW: CMB+HAPPY_1 , "Her best attack is no more dangerous than a tickle. At least she's learning the art of stalking before attacking. ",
Line 379:
OLD: CMB+HAPPY_2 , "Placehold CMB Happy 2",
NEW: CMB+HAPPY_2 , "She's learned to attack like a cat, with stealth and finesse.",
Line 380:
OLD: CMB+HAPPY_3 , "Placehold CMB Happy 3",
NEW: CMB+HAPPY_3 , "She's good enough now that I can teach her advanced techniques, like playing with your quarry before finishing them off.",
Line 382:
OLD: BAS+BORED , "Placehold BAS Bored",
NEW: BAS+BORED , "Are you sure I should be teaching this ? We cats aren't exactly renowned for our obedience.",
Line 383:
OLD: BAS+HAPPY_1 , "Placehold BAS Happy 1",
NEW: BAS+HAPPY_1 , "This is all very basic stuff. I can do it, so she shouldn't find it impossible.",
Line 384:
OLD: BAS+HAPPY_2 , "Placehold BAS Happy 2",
NEW: BAS+HAPPY_2 , "She obeys reasonably well. As well as a cat, at least.",
Line 385:
OLD: BAS+HAPPY_3 , "Placehold BAS Happy 3",
NEW: BAS+HAPPY_3 , "I think she's now better behaved than I am. Not that it would be all that hard.",
Line 388:
OLD: HSE+HAPPY_1 , "Placehold HSE Happy 1",
NEW: HSE+HAPPY_1 , "Even if she can't cook well, washing the pots and pans as well as cleaning and organising the kitchen is important to learn.",
Line 389:
OLD: HSE+HAPPY_2 , "Placehold HSE Happy 2",
NEW: HSE+HAPPY_2 , "I decided to give her a challenge. I had her clean my room, since I'm shedding. She actually managed it, for the most part.",
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