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Post by slackerfuu on Oct 29, 2010 3:36:57 GMT -5
Yay ;D more text. and you added in items/effects. ;D
and you're welcome. also: damn you. now I have something to do other than play Shadow of the Colossus.
might be important: I can't dl the text file this time. it does show up in the browser though so not too bad.
This can be useful if you and your assistant want to spend some time together. Not Implemented.
~~it works now right? so:
This can be useful if you and your assistant want to spend some time together.
She will not be allowed clothes and only be rewarded with human contact, if she acts like a cow
She will not be allowed clothes and only be rewarded with human contact if she acts like a cow.
Treat like a Pig Girl.
Treat like a Pig.
Many different dimensional copies of slaves fall through the sigularity into the pit.
Many different dimensional copies of slaves fall through the singularity into the pit.
This is influenced by your skill in Judging the quality of a slave, and will fluctuate.
This is influenced by your skill in Judging the quality of a slave and will fluctuate.
You will train your slave in how to use her ass with a toy.
You will teach your slave to pleasure her ass with a toy.
~~little less awkward
You will train your slave how to get off using a dildo.
You will teach your slave to get off using a dildo.
OR
You will teach your slave to pleasure herself using a dildo.
Your slave with play with herslef for your entertainment.
Your slave will play with herself for your entertainment.
Your slave with play with both her cock and pussy for your entertainment.
Your slave will play with both her cock and pussy for your entertainment.
Your slave with use her mouth on her own dick for your amusement.
Your slave will suck herself off for your amusement.
Treat like a Pony Girl.
Treat like a Pony.
~~unless Pony Girl is what you wanted. in which case change:
Treat like a Cow, Treat like a Pony, Treat like a Pig, Lockdown.
Treat like a Cow, Treat like a Pony Girl, Treat like a Pig, Lockdown.
The slave's ability to act like a pig.
The slave's ability to be a pig.
You must own a special remover, to remove tattoos.
You must own a special remover to remove a tattoo.
*Laugh*You ever hear the one about... *giggle* No its just too funny... *laugh*
*Laugh*You ever hear the one about... *giggle* No it's just too funny... *laugh*
You explain " + peopleName(1800) + " idea to " + peopleName(1800) + " about putting something else in her lower mouth and turning her laugh into moans.
You explain " + peopleName(1125) + "'s idea to " + peopleName(1800) + " about putting something else in her lower mouth and turning her laugh into moans.
Her shaking body slowly starts to shake for another reason as both giggles and moan combine.
Her shaking body slowly starts to shake for another reason as both giggles and moans combine.
She slumps down onto you. Her head resting on your breasts.
She slumps down onto you, her head resting on your breasts.
And now I have a way to releive the symptoms... all I need is to be fucked.
And now I have a way to relieve the symptoms... all I need is to be fucked.
You explain " + peopleName(1125) + " idea to " + peopleName(1800) + " about putting something else in her lower mouth
You explain " + peopleName(1125) + "'s idea to " + peopleName(1800) + " about putting something else in her mouth.
This is a earring with diamonds.
This is an earring inlaid with diamonds.
This is a earring with amethyst.
This is an earring inlaid with amethyst.
This is a earring with gold hoops.
A gold hoop.
A demons tail
A demon's tail.
The slave wear this is her ass all day gaining experience in clenching and unclenching her ass. This item can also be used for peronal training of your slave if kept in inventory.
The slave wears this is her ass all day gaining experience in clenching and unclenching her ass. This item can also be used for personal training of your slave if kept in inventory.
~~weird. 'unclench' is a word, but 'unclenchng' isn't. bah.
A pair of panties with a phallus attached to the front for lesbian or anal sex. This item can also be used for peronal training of your slave if kept in inventory.
A pair of panties with a phallus attached to the front for lesbian or anal sex. This item can also be used for personal training of your slave if kept in inventory.
OR
A pair of panties with a phallus attached to the front. This item can also be used for personal training of your slave if kept in inventory.
A vibrating phallus that will be pushed the slave's vagina. This item can also be used for peronal training of your slave if kept in inventory.
A vibrating phallus that will be pushed into the slave's vagina. This item can also be used for personal training of your slave if kept in inventory.
Either way it brings an anamalistic grin to a slave.
Either way it brings an animalistic grin to a slave.
~~pfft. says animalistic is misspelled. it's not. and yes, it's a word.
A hair pin that went out of fashion, before it was ever in fashion.
A hair pin that went out of fashion before it was ever in fashion.
Worn by shamanist priestess
Worn by priestesses.
A dress sewn with unique pattern from the eastern continent.
A dress sewn with a unique pattern from the eastern continent.
A dress often worn for formal event purpose. The design is based on popular dress design among the middle class citizens of Magmell.
A dress often worn for formal events. The design is based on a popular dress design among the middle class citizens of Magmell.
An eye accessory worn for intimidating look.
An eye accessory worn for an intimidating look.
A tinted glasses worn for the eyes mainly used for eye protection or fashion style.
Tinted glasses usually worn for eye protection or fashion.
A glasses for the eyes mainly worn by people with refractive defect. Some people worn it for eye protection or fashion style though.
Mainly worn by people with defective vision. Some people wear them for eye protection or fashion.
A stylish cap worn by spherian's wing rider.
A stylish cap worn by the Spherian's winged riders.
~~just checking: Spherians are all lesbians/female? 'cause I know the Spherian embassy only allows females.
Legend says it is belong to a man who love an opera singer, but too afraid to confess his love to her because of his scary-looking face.
Legends say it belonged to a man who loved an opera singer, but was too afraid to confess his love to her because of his scary-looking face.
A revealing costume that intended to make the wearer's resemble a rabbit, complete with its ears.
A revealing costume that was intended to make the wearer resemble a rabbit. Comes complete with ears.
A footwear that raises the heel of the wearer's foot significantly higher than the toes and often can be worn without socks.
Footwear that raises the heel of the wearer's foot significantly higher than the toes and can be worn without socks.
An ancient text that study about human sexual behavior. Contains many practical advice on sexual intercourse.
An ancient text about human sexual behavior. Contains lots of practical advice on sexual intercourse.
A book about discipline in battle and combat written by Sun Tzu, an ancient general from the eastern continent.
A book about discipline in battle and combat written by Sun Tzu, an ancient general from another world.
A collection of music sheet by Beethoven, a somewhat legendary composer said to come from another world.
A collection of music sheets by Beethoven, a somewhat legendary composer said to come from another world.
~~all tattoo text should be fixed twice 'cause of the plans
A tattoo with a picture of Yin Yang symbol, a symbol of harmony from the eastern continent.
A tattoo with a picture of Yin Yang symbol, a symbol of harmony from another world.
A beautiful rose picture, tattooed to your slave's breast or either arms or legs.
A beautiful rose picture, tattooed to your slave's breast, arm, or leg.
A picture of eastern dragon, a mythical creature from the eastern continent, tattooed to your slave's back.
A picture of an eastern dragon, a mythical creature from another world, tattooed to your slave's back.
It is said the design is inspired by a tattoo of a strong, spinach-loving sailorman.
It is said the design is inspired by a tattoo a strong, spinach-loving sailor had.
A detailed manual about the basic of paintings.
A detailed manual about the basics of painting.
var CompareItemTattooCircuit:Array = new Array(result, 63, "Sculpting Manual 1", "This integrated circuit can be tattooed onto a slave's skin to completely override her free will.", 9, 0, 0, 0, 0, true, 1000, 0, null, 0, true);
~~pretty sure you don't want it to be called Sculpting Manual 1. dunno what you meant to call it though.
~~nvm. found it further down, as you'll probly see. anyway, make it:
var CompareItemTattooCircuit:Array = new Array(result, 63, "Tattoo: Control Circuit", "This integrated circuit can be tattooed onto a slave's skin to completely override her free will.", 9, 0, 0, 0, 0, true, 1000, 0, null, 0, true);
~~although all the other tattoos have a 0 where the 1000 is. dunno if that's how it should be, specially since the other integrated circuit (later on) has a 1000 there as well. if it should be a 0:
var CompareItemTattooCircuit:Array = new Array(result, 63, "Tattoo: Control Circuit", "This integrated circuit can be tattooed onto a slave's skin to completely override her free will.", 9, 0, 0, 0, 0, true, 0, 0, null, 0, true);
A simple broom to sweep. It is quite hurt being hit with one, thus it can be used as a weapon.
A simple broom for sweeping. Being hit with one hurts quite a bit, thus it can also be used as a weapon.
A legendary violin said to have magical power and inspired many musicians to create masterpiece. Rumor said that there are only 5 Stradivarius ever made, making it very hard to have one.
A legendary violin said to have magical powers and inspired many musicians to create masterpieces. Rumor sais that there were only 5 Stradivarius ever made.
var result = new ItemWeaponStradivarius();
addChild(result);
result.visible = false;
var CompareItemWeaponStradivarius:Array = new Array(result, 64, "Stradivarius", "A legendary violin said to have magical power and inspired many musicians to create masterpiece. Rumor said that there are only 5 Stradivarius ever made, making it very hard to have one. Another extreme use of Stradivarius is using it as a weapon using its magical pitch to break enemy hearing and turning them insane.", 1, 0, 0, 0, 0, false, 2500, 0,7, -1,0,-10,0,50, 0, 100, null, 0, false);
itemCompareArray.push(CompareItemWeaponStradivarius);
var result = new ItemWeaponStradivarius();
addChild(result);
result.visible = false;
var CompareItemWeaponStradivarius:Array = new Array(result, 65, "Tattoo: Control Circuit", "This integrated circuit can be tattooed onto a slave's skin to completely override her free will", 9, 0, 0, 0, 0, false,1000, 0, null, 0, true);
itemCompareArray.push(CompareItemWeaponStradivarius);
~~Okay.... dunno what's going on here since you pretty much had integrated circuit done earlier, and the stradivarius is right above and complete. My suggestion: delete it and make something else the 65th item
A slave eating this flower will forget past class choices, that were passed on.
A slave eating this flower will forget past class choices were passed on, giving her another chance to gain the class.
Also can be used as a cooking Ingredient.
Can also be used as a cooking Ingredient.
~~there's 3 of these that need changing
A small needle that sparkles in sun light.
A small needle that sparkles in the sunlight.
An unique herb imported from the island nations of the west.
A unique herb imported from the island nations of the west.
OR
A unique herb from another world that was brought here by a traveler.
~~or something along those lines
Legend says that it is a favourite food of certain wolf deity from the northern realm.
Legend says that it is the favorite food of certain wolf deity from the northern realm.
OR
Legend says that it is the favorite food of certain wolf deity from another world.
There are only limited number of this potion available in the world, since the recipe is missing a long time ago, along with Eritar.
There are only limited number of this potion available in the world, since the recipe went missing a long time ago, along with Eritai.
~~changed Eritar to Eritai 'cause earlier in the description it said Eritai.
A food of the mysterious greenskin race that dwell deep inside the greens. Although tasted horrible, by some people it is considered a delicacy.
A food of the mysterious greenskin race that dwells deep inside the Green. Although it tastes horrible, by some people consider it a delicacy.
"Mint Leaf", "A drink extracted from an orange fruit and processed with special method from the Spherian. Originally an exclusive cuisine for the Spherian, now it is available for any people of Magmell.
"Orange Juice", "A drink extracted from an orange fruit and processed using a special method from the Spherians. Originally an exclusive cuisine for the Spherians, it is now available in the markets of Magmell.
A blood-like substance created by the Spherian used for medical purpose.
A blood-like substance created by the Spherians. Used for medical purposes.
Taste and looks like unwashed ass.
Tastes and looks like unwashed ass.
A prototype medicine to increase awareness and brain reflexes developed by the Spherian. People taking the drug are the trial subjects, fatalities should be reported to the embassy.
A prototype medicine to increase awareness and brain reflexes developed by the Spherians. People taking the drug are the test subjects. Fatalities and side effects should be reported to the embassy.
A seaweed with miraculous magical property that grows only in the South coral sea, home of the giant sea serpent, leviathan. Due to great danger faced in obtaining this item, only a very limited number available in the market.
A seaweed with miraculous magical property that grows only in the South coral sea, home of the giant sea serpent, Leviathan. Due to the great danger faced in obtaining this item, only a very limited number are available in the market.
A magical powder created by the notorious dark elves necromancer, Rynd. It is said to have the power to bring back the dead and corrupting people's mind, turning them into the living dead.
A magical powder created by the notorious dark elf necromancer, Rynd. It is said to have the power to bring back the dead and to corrupt people's minds, turning them into the living dead.
A beverage made by mixing grinded coffee beans with water, sometimes sugar or cream may be added to cover up the flavour.
A beverage made by mixing ground coffee beans with water. Sometimes sugar or cream may be added to cover up the flavour.
A common and easy dish to make, consists of rice, meat, and curry stew.
A common and easy dish to make. Consists of rice, meat, and curry stew.
A dish consists of variety individual portions of food, served in a small basket or steamer.
A dish consisting of various individual portions of food, served in a small basket or steamer.
A desert with soft texture with vanilla flavour.
A dessert with soft texture with vanilla flavour.
A dish consists of various mixed vegetables and fruits.
A dish consisting of various mixed vegetables and fruits.
A cut of meat that grilled into perfection.
A cut of meat that has been grilled to perfection.
A spicy soup from the eastern contains variety of seafood.
A spicy and sour soup that contains a variety of seafood.
"Tattoo Plans: Control Circuitry"
~~everywhere else it's 'circuit' so:
"Tattoo Plans: Control Circuit"
var CompareEffectCreative:Array = new Array(result, 7, "Charismatic", "A surge of creativity suddenly fill your slave's mind.", 0, 0, 0, 0, null, 7);
var CompareEffectCreative:Array = new Array(result, 7, "Creative", "A surge of creativity suddenly fill your slave's mind.", 0, 0, 0, 0, null, 7);
This girl is an alcoholic, she is at least need to consume a bottle of alcohol each day.
This girl is an alcoholic. She needs to consume at least one bottle of alcohol each day.
Your slave enjoy being naked in front of others and refused to wear any clothes.
Your slave enjoys being naked in front of others and refuses to wear any clothes.
var CompareEffectLycan:Array = new Array(result, 10, "Exhibitionist", "This girl is infected: Lycanthropy. If not treated soon the slave will turn into a were-creature.", 0, 0, 0, 0, null, 10);
var CompareEffectLycan:Array = new Array(result, 10, "Lycanthropy", "This girl is infected: Lycanthropy. If not treated soon the slave will turn into a were-creature.", 0, 0, 0, 0, null, 10);
Your slave is mean to others and can quickly get angry or pissed off over trivial thing.
Your slave is mean to others and can quickly get angry or pissed off over trivial things.
You know need to keep a closer eye on her or increase her happiness or she will attempt to run away again.
You now need to keep a closer eye on her or increase her happiness or she will attempt to run away again.
This girl is sick and need to rest for a few days.
This girl is sick and needs to rest for a few days.
This girl is in the state of coma, neither dead nor alive.
This girl is in a of coma, neither dead nor alive.
"Bad Wound",
"Badly Wounded",
~~with the 3 'drunk' effects the text is the same, just with a different '+#'. so: 'The slave is badly drunk. +#' dunno if that's intentional.
This girl looks demotivated.
This girl is demotivated.
OR
This girl is demotivated. <detail of some sort>
It looks like your slave is having a hard time to rest.
Your slave has a hard time going to sleep.
lots of items.
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Post by slackerfuu on Nov 2, 2010 0:27:56 GMT -5
so i assume my corrections are now your default. in any case, a few of them i messed up on/overlooked some grammar stuffs, so... fixes:
A dessert with soft texture with vanilla flavour.
A dessert with a soft texture and vanilla flavour.
A surge of creativity suddenly fill your slave's mind.
A surge of creativity suddenly fills your slave's mind.
This girl is in a of coma, neither dead nor alive.
This girl is in a coma, neither dead nor alive.
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